Comment on Peer Blog

I commented on Cleo's blog, Sexual and Gender Identity Rights Paper.




First of all, let me say that this is an excellent paper. You have great structure, flow, and diction. I read many papers on Professor Kat's blog, and your paper stuck out to me because I felt it was the most informative. You gave multiple statistics, personal stories, quotes from organizations, and historical examples. You did a nice job supporting your ideas.
The one thing that I found to be a little confusing was when you said, "Lastly, it is fundamental to recognize that judging a LGBT based upon general misconceptions, the notion that they are more likely to molest children, and that all LGBTs commit other crimes is completely erroneous"...I was a little confused here because there was no transition from your last paragraph and you had not talked about LGBT's being linked to crime.
Overall, I really enjoyed your paper. I was able to easily understand it. GREAT JOB!!!!

November 28, 2007 8:39 AM